17A Elevator Pitch No. 2
The pitch:
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Fl16Goe-f98
A reflection on the feedback of my last pitch:
After my first pitch, I showed it to a few of my friends and family members, and they noted that I should give a few more details about what specific services will be offered at Homeward Bound Florida. They said that I was a little vague, and could make my pitch a tad longer.
What did I change, based on the feedback?
For the second pitch, I made sure to include specific services that Homeward Bound Florida would offer--specifically, cooking classes, Microsoft office lessons, and financial literacy classes.
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Fl16Goe-f98
A reflection on the feedback of my last pitch:
After my first pitch, I showed it to a few of my friends and family members, and they noted that I should give a few more details about what specific services will be offered at Homeward Bound Florida. They said that I was a little vague, and could make my pitch a tad longer.
What did I change, based on the feedback?
For the second pitch, I made sure to include specific services that Homeward Bound Florida would offer--specifically, cooking classes, Microsoft office lessons, and financial literacy classes.
Hi Julianna! Great post! I went ahead and read what feedback you were provided with before watching your video so I could see if the changes were implemented and I think you did a great job adding them! Just like a comment I wrote before; I think it is really great to provide a description of the product you are trying to pitch to give the audience and vivid picture! Great Job!
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ReplyDeleteI have loved watching the development of your opportunity as I think this is one of the most prevalent issues within Alachua county. I like how you provided statistics on the ratio of homeless people to those who are provided shelter. It is also important that you provided the means of creating these shelters.
~Sophia Scherzer
Hi Julianna, thanks for sharing. You can definitely see the improvement between your first pitch and this current one. You were able to go into more detail on the programs and ways you would be helping the homeless population while still keeping your pitch succinct and to the point. This is a great achievement as having this more focused pitch would really help to get potential investors more interested. Great job!
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